Reflection on Project 3

In the following blog post I will write short answers to the nine items from Writing Public Lives.

Jankowski, Jessica. "Screenshot" 22 Nov. 2015. 

1. My final draft was different from my rough draft in that I re-worded almost all of my paragraphs to make them clearer, I added another paragraph detailing my original controversy with Zaha Hadid, and I changed my intro so they purpose of my argument seemed clearer.

2. My thesis/organization remained mostly the same.

3. These changes were made so that the purpose of my argument would seem clearer.

4. As an author, having a clearer argument and a stronger purpose makes my argument easier to understand so I have more credibility as I wrote an convincing article.

5. The audience will understand the argument I am trying to make in an easier manner.

6.7. Sentence structure was considered, and the flow of my sentences were rearranged so that everything was very simple and clear/easy to understand so that my audience wouldn't get distracted and loose interest from complicated and hard to understand wording in my sentences.

8. no

9. By reflecting on my writing it helps emphasize the points in my writing that I had to work on. I can better understand where I improved so that I can use my new knowledge in improving my future writing assignments.

Publishing Public Argument

HERE is my final public argument. In the following blog post I will answer some questions about my final public argument. 

OpenClipartVectors. Unnamed. 2013. Public Domain.

1. Mark with an "x" where you feel your target audience currently stands on the issue (before reading/watcing/hearing your argument) below:

←------------------------------------------------X----|--------------------------------------------------------->

Strongly                                            Totally neutral                                                    Strongly

agree                                                                                                                          disagree

2. Now mark with an "x" where you feel your target audience should be (after they've read/watched/heard your argument) below:

←--------X--------------------------------------------|--------------------------------------------------------->

Strongly                                            Totally neutral                                                    Strongly

agree                                                                                                                          disagree

3. Check one (and only one) of the argument types below for your public argument:

         _______ My public argument etsablishes an original pro position on an issue of debate.

         _______ My public argument establishes an original con position on an issue of debate.

         _______ My public argument clarifies the causes for a problem that is being debated.

         ____X___ My public argument proposes a solution for a problem that is being debated.

         _______ My public argument positively evaluate a specific solution or policy under debate (and clearly identifies the idea I'm supporting).

         _______ My public argument openly refutes a specific solution or policy under debate (and clearly identifies the idea I'm refuting).

4. Briefly explain how your public argument doesn’t simply restate information from other sources, but provides original context and insight into the situation:

The original controversy over the Tokyo Olympic 2020 stadium only focused on why Japan was or wasn't wrong for choosing to not use architect Zaha Hadid's proposed stadium plans. My public argument brings about the topic that maybe Japan isn't to blame, but the architect herself and any architect who designs a project that blows a budget should hold blame, and therefore make an effort to not design over budget in the future. 

5. Identify the specific rhetorical appeals you believe you've employed in your public argument below:

Ethical or credibility-establishing appeals

                    _____ Telling personal stories that establish a credible point-of-view

                    _____ Referring to credible sources (established journalism, credentialed experts, etc.)

                    __x___ Employing carefully chosen key words or phrases that demonstrate you are credible (proper terminology, strong but clear vocabulary, etc.)

                    _____ Adopting a tone that is inviting and trustworthy rather than distancing or alienating

                    ___x__ Arranging visual elements properly (not employing watermarked images, cropping images carefully, avoiding sloppy presentation)

                    _____ Establishing your own public image in an inviting way (using an appropriate images of yourself, if you appear on camera dressing in a warm or friendly or professional manner, appearing against a background that’s welcoming or credibility-establishing)

                    _____ Sharing any personal expertise you may possess about the subject (your identity as a student in your discipline affords you some authority here)

                    _____ Openly acknowledging counterarguments and refuting them intelligently

                    __x___ Appealing openly to the values and beliefs shared by the audience (remember that the website/platform/YouTube channel your argument is designed for helps determine the kind of audience who will encounter your piece)

                    _____ Other: 

Emotional appeals

                    _____ Telling personal stories that create an appropriate emotional impact for the debate

                    _____ Telling emotionally compelling narratives drawn from history and/or the current culture

                    _____ Employing the repetition of key words or phrases that create an appropriate emotional impact

                    ___x__ Employing an appropriate level of formality for the subject matter (through appearance, formatting, style of language, etc.)

                    _____ Appropriate use of humor for subject matter, platform/website, audience

                    ___x__ Use of “shocking” statistics in order to underline a specific point

                    __x___ Use of imagery to create an appropriate emotional impact for the debate

                    ___x__ Employing an attractive color palette that sets an appropriate emotional tone (no clashing or ‘ugly’ colors, no overuse of too many variant colors, etc.)

                    _____ Use of music to create an appropriate emotional impact for the debate

                    _____ Use of sound effects to create an appropriate emotional impact for the debate

                    ___x_ Employing an engaging and appropriate tone of voice for the debate

                    _____ Other: 

Logical or rational appeals

                    _____ Using historical records from credible sources in order to establish precedents, trends, or patterns

                    __x___ Using statistics from credible sources in order to establish precedents, trends, or patterns

                    _____ Using interviews from stakeholders that help affirm your stance or position

                    _____ Using expert opinions that help affirm your stance or position

                    __x___ Effective organization of elements, images, text, etc.

                    _____ Clear transitions between different sections of the argument (by using title cards, interstitial music, voiceover, etc.)

                    __x___ Crafted sequencing of images/text/content in order to make linear arguments

                    ___x__ Intentional emphasis on specific images/text/content in order to strengthen argument

                    ____x_ Careful design of size/color relationships between objects to effectively direct the viewer’s attention/gaze (for visual arguments)

                    _____ Other: 

6. Below, provide us with working hyperlinks to THREE good examples of the genre you've chosen to write in. These examples can come from Blog Post 11.3 or they can be new examples. But they should all come from the same specific website/platform and should demonstrate the conventions for your piece:

Example 1

Example 2

Example 3

Reflection on Project 3 Draft

In the following blog post I will reflect on my project 3 draft and peer editing process.
I peer edited Mehruba and Dylan's drafts.

GlacierNPS, "Reflection on Lake McDonald". 14 May 2012. Public Domain. 

I had comments from three of my piers on my draft, however I could only access one peer review sheet from Alyssa Bohland. She gave me very good feedback and I agree with all of it. I know that I proposed a solution to the controversy, however just like she pointed out I need to further elaborate on how the solution of budgeting can be carried out. 

I need to work on argumentation more in adding more detail and explanation to how I want my proposed solution carried out so that my argument has more weight and purpose to it. 

Overall, I feel like my draft is almost complete. I seem to have been very successful with my use of genre and audience, I just need to add a little bit more explanation and I will be done!

Draft of Public Argument

In this blog post I have a link to my draft of my public argument. I know I have some formatting issues as there are long spaces between photos. Please look to see if I have enough text and if the captions from my photos tie into the text enough or if they are distracting. Please be honest! Thank you!

LINK TO MY DRAFT

Considering Visual Elements

In the following post I will answer some questions from Writing Public Lives in order to better understand what visual elements will work best for my project three blog post argument. However, I don't have the book with me right now so this blog post will have to wait.

Project 3 Outline

In the following blog post I will outline my argument

Introduction:
For my introduction, I plan on using the technique of thinking about my situation or Kairos, I will need to move my audience to think about my issue in a specific context and by drawing on my controversy from the Tokyo 2020 stadium, I can convince my audience that planning over budget should be avoided as much as possible.
*I want my readers to consider the argument from the clients/general public's point of view; it is important to consider the magnitude of how architect's considerations can affect other people.
Body:
1. Supporting arguments for my position include:

• over budget=unhappy clients
• budget is not completely out of the responsibilities of the architect
• architects have a responsibility to manipulate materials for the best possible outcome
• public outrage over big projects over budget can cause political stir

2. Major Criticisms:

• Architects cannot control budget (they give what the client needs and cannot change contracting prices)
• architects have a responsibility to create livable art at any cost
• architects who are very popular have a design reputation to uphold
• clients are responsible for price depending on what they choose to include in the project

3. Key support and rebuttal points with tentative topic sentences:

Over budget=unhappy clients (USE UNSUCCESSFUL EXAMPLES)

• When going over budget, clients are put in a hard situation as the architect did not do his/her job to deign a plan within the set parameters. 

Budget is not completely out of the responsibilities of the architect: 

• Architects have a responsibility to provide a building plan that makes their clients happy while still designing creatively; this can be done on budget as long as careful consideration is put into the scale and materials used. 

Public outrage over big projects over budget can cause political stir: (USE CONTROVERSY EXAMPLE)

• For large scale projects such as the Tokyo 2020 olympic stadium, public outrage over the amount of money spend on a project will leave the client/government with no choice but to abandon your plans, leaving you jobless and the client unhappy. 

Unsuccessful examples:

Successful examples:

Controversy example:

Conclusion:

For my conclusion, I will focus on the future of the debate. I will mention that buildings that continue to go over budget will cause a developed loss of trust in architects/buildings. The general public, especially the general public in a shaky economy, will not want to build if they know that it will be outrageously expensive. Architecture is a gift, but it should not venture into the land of inaccessible luxury. 

Reflection:
I looked at both Mehruba's and Trey's Blog posts for their project three outline. They are both further along than me in that they have both written their rough draft and I have not, however both of their outlines didn't contain much information. Hopefully by writing out such simple outlines their ideas weren't affected negatively. I found that although I didn't finish my outline, what I have written was enough for me to gather my ideas and I am ready to start my rough draft. 

Analyzing My Genre

In the following blog post I will provide you with hyperlinks to 5 different examples of my genre  (Blog Posts loaded with visual information/pictures).

A.K.Khalifeh. "Beirut Central District Collage." 6 April 2013. Public Domain. 

Example 1 (contains a video)
Example 2 (contains a slideshow!)
Example 3
Example 4
Example 5

This genre is typically set on a website or blog designed for readers that are in the architecture industry as architects are very visual people who appreciate pictures. The subject normally ranges from different design techniques to new and interesting buildings to appreciating buildings that have been around for a while. This genre serves to entertain, teach, and inform architects and designers in an easy to read and understand way, as it is leisure reading.

Visual content is a must, there is an informative tone with simple sentences and evidence is given in a visual manner rather than in a hyperlink or direct quote. Quotes from interviews are frequent, however.

The texts normally open with a sentence that summarizes what the blog post will be about, along with a picture that also encompasses what the post will discuss. There isn't really a conclusion, rather the blog posts end when all of the necessary information is presented and readers finish feeling like they are well informed and/or entertained.

Sentence structure is very simple along with paragraphs being no more than 2-3 sentences. Most sentences are actually captions for pictures that convey information. However, some blog posts go into more depth about the topic which is what I will have to do to accurately convey my argument.

Word choice is simple however there are some words that are architecture "slang" used as the audience is mostly architects and designers. The overall text balances between formal and informal, definitely not humorous or academic in any way.

Writers and readers in this genre are encouraged to spend time looking at the photographs while processing the writing in the blog post. Comment sections are left after each blog post however readers don't always choose to participate in the conversation as most blog posts aren't that controversial as they are more there for the entertainment and leisure of readers.

REFLECTION:
After reading both of Savannah's and Brandon's  Blog posts, it seems like we all understood the most important aspect to picking a genre to write in: our audience. Savannah had a more targeted audience while Brandon narrowed his audience by choosing a genre as specific as Time Magazine. Overall, I think all of our genres fit the audience we want to present our arguments to.